joe-ilya
Hey, Ron! Can we say 'fuck' in the game?
a simple word, a simple turd
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Post by joe-ilya on Apr 15, 2022 17:47:29 GMT -5
WTF is up with characters calling each other faggots? If doomguy and knuckles have a gay relationship, then use gay, not faggot. We call each other faggots all the time and you never complained.. :'( I thought it was our special bonding and now, now this? What is this all about, Joe? Another projection? Gosh.. you are so hard to deal sometimes. Why can we solve these things in private like everyone else. Who the fuck are you? |
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 15, 2022 17:49:42 GMT -5
that is pintolin0
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joe-ilya
Hey, Ron! Can we say 'fuck' in the game?
a simple word, a simple turd
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Post by joe-ilya on Apr 15, 2022 17:50:34 GMT -5
Doesn't ring a bell, whatever
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 15, 2022 18:27:40 GMT -5
pintolin 0 is a very good friend. he is a very good friend who tries to help me and he supports me. maybe u should try to be friends with him too because he makes new accounts all the time. but he is a very good friend
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Post by dn on Apr 16, 2022 7:54:20 GMT -5
I liked the bit about butter.
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 16, 2022 7:59:53 GMT -5
thx. whats ur favorite part about the butter ?
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Post by Deleted on Apr 16, 2022 10:47:49 GMT -5
Wtf one can justify killing a man for being 1 hour later to deliver pizza and not go to prison? And this story is written by the same guy who reported me for wishing a death upon someone? And this plot twist was overlooked in favor of some inappropriate sexual references?
Anyway, doomguy goes to prison, slips on the butter there and is being raped by everybody in the ass until he dies. End of story.
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 16, 2022 13:31:05 GMT -5
its a story its not real and the pizza delivering guy has delivered the pizza wrong to provoke knuckles
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Post by Deleted on Apr 16, 2022 13:43:13 GMT -5
Yeah but it's a very fucked up story. It's one thing to say that doomguy (yeah, you gotta understand that knuckles can't make decisions on their own) got mad at a pizza guy and killed him, but judge acquiting him of the crime? Sonic interference?
What's the moral of this story then? Ah, I see. There is no moral in this story, it's just like a fucked up dream. Perhaps the good takeaway from this is that you're writing for your own pleasure and not for the purpose of indoctrination like the adults do.
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 16, 2022 13:44:14 GMT -5
really ? okay im sorry. i was not thinking about morals so much when i was writing it. but i thought about it and i think youre right. so , how should i change the story to make it better ?
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Post by Deleted on Apr 16, 2022 13:59:32 GMT -5
Well, the fight with pizzaguy has to be prevented somehow so that doomguy/knuckles don't commit a crime in first place. No one dies basically and no one goes to prison.
Also, for example, sonic could have the power to roll back the time... at least then there would be some morals demonstrated by sonic that murder is a bad thing and it doesn't want that to happen, so gives drunk doomguy a second chance. This way also less of a story can be rewritten, as you can let the doomguy being taken to court first so that judge condemns him too. Maybe this way sonic would rather be appearing when demons arrive, as throwing doomguy in prison prevents him from being able to save humanity again.
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 16, 2022 14:05:12 GMT -5
okay so , the judge says : knuckles has to go to a prison because he killed the pizza delivering guy , and then sonic decides , okay i will reverse time until they reach the point where knuckles receives his pizza , and when knuckles gets angry and prepares to murder the pizza delivering guy , sonic tells knuckles that murdering people is wrong and knuckles says to sonic , okay sorry and knuckles takes his pizza and eats it. right ?
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Post by Deleted on Apr 16, 2022 14:08:59 GMT -5
Yeah, something like that.
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 16, 2022 14:28:02 GMT -5
okay thank you for this idea , and i am still thinking about it but i am not sure how to write this yet.
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joe-ilya
Hey, Ron! Can we say 'fuck' in the game?
a simple word, a simple turd
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Post by joe-ilya on Apr 16, 2022 14:51:19 GMT -5
There's zero tension in your stories when Sonic pops out of nowhere and starts reversing time with no motive.
Pintholio's imp sex story is much better.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 16, 2022 15:01:40 GMT -5
Really? A doomguy going to prison amidst demon invasion is zero tension? Sonic reversing time so that doomguy won't be rendered helpless when demons invade because of committing a crime is no motive?
Maybe the execution needs to be polished, but all the foundantions of tense story is there.
P.S. Also the fuck with you joe condoning furries and bestiality. Are you secretly into this shit? I remember this forum doesn't like furries much. I don't believe it would suddenly find furry-shagging acceptable.
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 16, 2022 15:08:08 GMT -5
joe ilya always insults me for no reason.
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joe-ilya
Hey, Ron! Can we say 'fuck' in the game?
a simple word, a simple turd
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Post by joe-ilya on Apr 16, 2022 15:41:12 GMT -5
Are you telling me you've never played a single map where you're stuck in a demon possessed prison and escape?
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 16, 2022 15:46:09 GMT -5
no , i never played a wad like that
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Post by dangerousdaviebowie on Apr 16, 2022 22:34:05 GMT -5
no , i never played a wad like that then what he is explaining is tension. the story needs some tension to get the readers hooked on it. otherwise its a chore to read through. |
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Post by Deleted on Apr 17, 2022 8:22:04 GMT -5
Where's the part where Doomguy has inappropriate intercourse with an imp? That would be really hot. get the hell outta here, Coomer, nobody wants your interspecies fetishes. Am I right Gord~... Gordon?! |
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Post by Deleted on Apr 17, 2022 8:26:24 GMT -5
how is that better , at least my story didnt have sex. His story does have a consistency. Not to mention that people there are horny fucks so that would be expected for sex be included. Thanks Joe. |
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Post by Deleted on Apr 17, 2022 8:30:59 GMT -5
Yeah but it's a very fucked up story. It's one thing to say that doomguy (yeah, you gotta understand that knuckles can't make decisions on their own) got mad at a pizza guy and killed him, but judge acquiting him of the crime? Sonic interference? What's the moral of this story then? Ah, I see. There is no moral in this story, it's just like a fucked up dream. Perhaps the good takeaway from this is that you're writing for your own pleasure and not for the purpose of indoctrination like the adults do. Lol calm down, THE MERGE IS ON. DON'T YOU SEE? SALVATION! PICTURE IT, TEN MILLION LIVES - GONE IN EFFICIENT AND ELEGANT MANNER. IT'S A REQUIEM... COMMAND DUTY OFFICER, FULL SPEED AHEAD! |
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Post by mayhemicdestrvctor on Apr 17, 2022 8:35:25 GMT -5
okay so how can i improve my story
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Post by Deleted on Apr 17, 2022 11:58:34 GMT -5
okay so how can i improve my story start from excluding anything sonic, and never bring up the bunny boobies. |
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